Wish You'd Ask Me - ID# 216

Oak Park River Forest

Music Video

Entry Description

A boy struggles to make a phone call to a girl he likes.

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Recent Teacher Comments

• 4/23 8:13 pm - This was creepy!! I mean...this was cool. It really was cool and creepy at the same time. I also got angry at him. Like, "I'm sorry, sir...you can go ask *her*, stop sitting there in your bougie apartment all like, wah wah wah, I want her to call *me*, I'm nervous, I'm sad." Okay. I got that out of my system. I thought having the couple like that was definitely creative and unexpected, so it drew me in. Your filming was crisp, the jump cuts with them on the couch was well done and timed with the music. Your setting was exquisite, and you used it well. Very nicely done.
• 3/6 6:26 am - This was well-filmed and very creative. I like the ending too! I like how they moved to the music and how it faded out with the music too in the beginnng with the telephone. Great use of the camera both inside, with the phone, outside on the balcony and even with a little bit of stop motion.

Judge 1

Positives: Some of the camera movements work well (the phones). The storytelling is clear.

Improvements: The editing can be less distracting by being less mickey mousy. The color grading can be more consistent.

Judge 2

Positives: I love the scene with the chair and the eyes. Nice performances.

Improvements: Compositions could have been stronger. Cutting on the drumbeat got too repetitive.

Judge 3

Positives: The cut-on-the-beat editing trick seemed a bit distracting at first but keeping it going throughout the song was actually a really effective way to put the viewer in an alternative and open mindset. You can never get too comfortable watching this guy because he can never get comfortable with himself. As far as production design is concerned, I loved the eyes and the cut scenes on the couches. The stark set design really gave you a feeling that this wasn't intended to be real but in a way that wasn't so obvious. And you found a rotary phone! Props to the prop master on that one!

Improvements: The story was a bit one dimensional. I could have used some more of the fantasy cut scenes to really delve into his mind. Even in his fantasies he can't get close to her. It works for the character but is frustrating to watch. The last shot was fun but you could have made the twist a bit twistier. You have a great eye for visual storytelling, just make sure your stories are interesting in their own right! Great job though. This is an excellent video.

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