Keely Johnson Feature - ID# 310

Waubonsie Valley

News Package

Entry Description

News package on a first-year high school teacher, who graduated from the same school she's teaching in.

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Recent Teacher Comments

• 4/23 8:29 pm - I like that you chose a unique topic to your community to highlight. I second the comments below and do not want to be redundant. This was one of my favorite pieces. I would have tried to pull yearbook photos or ask Ms. Johnson for photos or videos of her when she was a student. Otherwise, I really enjoyed this piece. If you are an underclassman, keep making pieces. If you are a senior, I wish you the best in your future and congratulations!
• 3/16 8:27 pm - Great story Rosie, loved that you were able to pull b-roll of Ms. Johnson as a student. However, the segment when she was talking about all the change since she has been gone would have been a great way to showcase some of the new things at the school especially for the students who might take those things for granted ( and help drive the point home of some of the things she was saying). Instead during that segment, you just continued to show more b-roll of her teaching in the classroom. At about 1 minute into the piece she provides the transition herself (which is great) to the next topic about her involvement as a cheerleader, I just might have put a little more of a pause from the previous topic about the changes, so your audience would kind of see that different point was being made. Your audio levels were great (matched), I thought the vintage b-roll made the story fun for current students. Great Job on this story.

Judge 1

Positives: - Your writing at the beginning is pretty good. I liked how you set up the story as her coming back -- and the old photos/video of her were great. - Your use of natural sound at the end was a great ending!

Improvements: - You missed the opportunity for some natural sound in this piece. Natural sound helps set the scene and makes the viewer feel like they're there. You used it at the end -- which was awesome -- but we could use more if it throughout, especially at the start. - I would've liked to have seen more b-roll of her teaching, and more shot composition in that. You have some great wide shots -- but try to sequence some shots moving forward. Start wide, go medium, then close up on different things. This will help with flow. Also, try to pick a background for your interview that isn't right up against a wall. Try zooming in for different questions.

Judge 2

Positives: Liked how you have then and now. Showing us rather than just telling. Liked how you used a lot of sound and let her tell her story

Improvements: You can center up your interviews if the background adds nothing. Not sure what the mural is behind the teacher, but her against that wall adds nothing. Why didn't you interview anyone else? One of her previous teachers? Even a student who feels inspired by her journey back to the school You could add some nat pops of her teaching

Judge 3

Positives: -Story was written well, I liked that the reporter's track matched the video in the story. -Good use of video and photos to capture the essence of the story

Improvements: -I would've liked to hear more natural sound to drive the story. (example: place a lavalier microphone on teacher while she's with students. use audio from her lessons to students in between reporter's track ) -Highly suggest the report does a stand-up to establish who is telling the story.

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