Fallen Wallet - ID# 342
Shepard High School
Dramatic Narrative
Entry Description
A high school teen is subject to a demonic presence in the hopes of extracting his soul. The teen does everything in his power to try and prevent this but is taken by surprise by its unconventional methods.
Copyright Info
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KkSfEQcZHy8
Recent Teacher Comments
- 3/16 7:46 pm - Watch the jump cuts where you go from one shot to the next but the framing doesn’t change much (i.e. 15 sec, 41 sec) put a cutaway in between to hide those kind of cuts. When editing a sequence together make sure you bridge the audio together so it all flows together.(19sec to 22 sec). This is an issue throughout your piece. Your video lacked a soundtrack. The music would help set the mood you want to convey, but also hide some of the more oblivious audio cuts. The lighting seems to change throughout your piece try and keep it consistent so it doesn’t distract your viewer, Work at matching your audio levels, they seem to be all over. It is ok if you are not using a boom mic, etc. But make sure you match it better in post-production. The constant changes kept pulling my focus off of your story. Keep at it, you are a good storyteller, just don’t let the tools get in the way of your story.
- 3/10 11:01 am - Positives: Story has some possibilities, including the strategy to bookend the opening and closing scene; some of the quick-paced editing helped to add to the tension. Areas for improvement: Lighting is inconsistent & distracts from the story; details like seeing someone pull the blinds at 2:20 shouldn't be overlooked--use a different take; some scenes lack natural audio, which interrupts the flow (:49- 1:07).
- 3/9 7:36 pm - cuts are abrupt; some shots... the lighting changes back and forth a bit too much; some shots not super clear; good attempt at a variety of shots
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