MMEA Fest

Dramatic narrative - horror style

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VXoxWpC02xA

3/16 7:45 pm - Your use of sound to help tell the story was great. It really helped tell your story and make your audience feel uneasy. You have some good visuals but I think some more close ups to break up all the wide shots would have helped as well as force your audience just what you want them to see and feel. Your Mom was a good sport for acting, but she didn’t come off as convincing and while it is easy to blame her, the problem was her lines. It seemed like all she wanted to do was read her book and not take care of her daughter. I would have been more convinced if her line was more like “the drug store is closed now honey, we will have to wait until tomorrow, I am sorry, but I think you should be ok”. I think that would have come across more compassionate – and as an audience then I think they will care more about the fate of the main character. I am usually not a fan of the horror genre, but I must admit you pulled me in and made me want to follow the story throughout your video.
3/10 11:00 am - Areas for improvement: Shots are a bit dark and need to be lit better. Spoken words are sometimes overtaken by the music bed. Inconsistent audio levels and audio that peaks are distracting from the storyline.
3/9 7:36 pm - distortion; some lighting issues; good story line; variety of shots

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