No Money, No Regret - ID# 440
Vernon Hills
Dramatic Narrative
Entry Description
A kid, after falling out of a tree, discovers he has a disease that is soon to be terminal. Already in debt from the medical bills from the fall, he can't pay for the surgery that gives him a chance to live. His friend, desperate to not lose a life long companion, robs the restaurant they work at. Unfortunately, he gets caught and goes to jail for more time than his friend has to live. Will he find the money hidden by his friend in time to save his own life?
Copyright Info
Music produced for the film by Vernon Hills High School student Daniel Patt.
Recent Teacher Comments
- 3/16 7:48 pm - Your camera shots and use of movement are excellent you have a way of pulling your audience in with what seems like every shot. The pace that you edit at also keeps your story moving, but be careful not to move to fast, it might be clear in your head, but your audience needs to know what is going on so they can be on board. For example, I saw the bill 16K, but I would have liked to seen the friend struggle with the concept of stealing a little more so I could understand the severity of what he was doing (and was their really 16k in the register?) You made some jumps at the end of the story that without your description I don’t know that I would have followed. Again, be careful in the fast pace of editing and shots that your audience doesn’t miss key elements of your story. Great locations, and planning to add to the authenticity of the story, and great job of not showing off your locations or resources, other students might be tempted to spend more time on the settings and slow the story. I don’t know if this was a team effort or the work of a couple but you have some absolutely amazing visuals, and your music (because it is original) fits so well with the story and helps your audience transition. I truly enjoyed your camera work the editing and the music there was a synergy about it all, just be careful the story doesn’t get lost in the process. I would have given it a 10 out of 10, but I couldn’t - truthfully it was hard for me to follow at the end, because it moved so fast I didn’t fully know the characters. I know you did, and it is clear to you just but don’t forget to look at it through the eyes of your audience who is taking it all in for the first time.
- 3/10 11:05 am - Positives: Engaging use of the paramedic truck and court room location; drone shot at the van pulls away was effective, but could have used a siren sound effect to make it complete (there was a siren when the truck pulled up); interesting story idea; the flashback scene is handled nicely; wardrobe change from the court scene into orange jumpsuit & mug shot works well. Areas for improvement: Story has a few gaps that need filling: show the friend's conflict before he just takes the money from the register, not sure why the map is at the court trial, not sure why the sick boy seems "surprised" that he has the money in his pocket at the end. Good start but there are story gaps that need filling to make this flow better.
- 3/9 7:37 pm - cinematography is excellent
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