Paper Boys - ID# 45

Glenbrook South

Comedic Narrative

Entry Description

Aidan, an experienced paperboy, and Tom, a paperboy-in-training, are delivering newspapers one morning, when they stumble upon some strange circumstances and go on an unexpected journey.

Copyright Info

Written permission to use music by De Wolfe Music.

Recent Teacher Comments

• 4/23 1:17 pm - Successful - Nice cinematography and editing. Good acting. Funny concept. Good use of music to exaggerate the mood and comedy. Good pacing. Needs Work - Not bad overall, but maybe a bit more shot variety would be nice. Most of the shots are medium shots or two-shots of the main characters, which is fine, but we never see much else. Even a few simple insert shots or cutaways could pep this up a bit.
• 3/6 11:46 am - Nice short complete narrative that fits within 5 minutes and has quite a few comedic elements. I like both of your characters and I think you do a sound job developing them in a short Amount of time. Some good work with controlled lighting as well as natural lighting. The audio throughout is very sound. I think the humor comes across throughout the film at multiple points. It's funny both visually with the camera work and with the written word.

Judge 1

Positives: Well acted and edited...the lighting was a challenge, and the story could have been contrived but really almost parodied itself...well done

Improvements: The inside lighting--blue--was creative and effective, but Tom's orange vest was distracting and took away from the scene

Judge 2

Positives: The camera work was excellent- great compositions, lighting and character blocking. It felt professional. The characters were excellent. Everyone played their part very well- a testament to good casting & directing. Good stuff!

Improvements: The audio was spotty at certain points, which took me out of the story. Not a huge deal, but important nonetheless.

Judge 3

Positives: I love the brief shift into horror. Horror and comedy are always a winning combination in my book. This of course ended pleasantly and that was a welcome shift back into easy going fun. But it was pretty seamless. Great direction by Maggie. The characters were clearly defined in their roles. I love a good first day on the job scenario. You played well with those tropes. The end wraps up nicely. Tom experiences a notable change by improving his throw and earning his satchel. A menial thing to the audience, but humorously very meaningful to Tom. Great performance from the girl in the house! The paper delivery scene was a ton of fun! Really well shot and edited. It succeeded in capturing the essence of being a paperboy. Read the comic book Paper Girls by Brian K. Vaughan if you are into Paper kid stories in general. It's wild! The lighting inside the house was great. That was all very well shot and the momentary suspense was well executed in general.

Improvements: I'd like to know just a little more about the characters before diving into the plot. Even something small and quirky just to paint a more multidimensional character. There might even be ways to accomplish this without having to reshoot anything. A brief bio card for the characters perhaps? I know a 5 minute limit is a bit restrictive, but I think you could definitely given us a little more Tom being goofy with Aidan as the straight man and develop that a bit. Perhaps in a sequel?

Judge 4

Positives:

Improvements: