The Varsity Artist - ID# 466
Maine West
News Package
Entry Description
This is a news story about what happens when an art students joins the varsity football team for the day.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/23 6:31 pm - I like that you chose a unique topic to your community to highlight. I second the comments below and do not want to be redundant. This was one of my favorite pieces. Here are ways you can improve. There were spots on camera lens that were picked up by the sun. Ask to see if your teacher/sponsor can clean that for you before you borrow a camera or if it is your camera, clean that lens with a lint free cloth. I think you can improve on your framing and watch those audio levels. If you are an underclassman, keep making pieces. If you are a senior, I wish you the best in your future and congratulations!
- 3/16 8:17 pm - I thought you had a great job of setting up the story with your words, and what a creative idea to implement. I also liked the outcome of the story, at first it had a certain predictability about it but I like the way painted the fb players in a different light, as a welcoming group of guys, it was also really nice to hear the football player at the end say we all work really hard, but I didn’t find his interview as convincing as the other player/coach. I felt like the B-Roll was not your strength with this story, because you were talking about him running routes, blocking, and catching the football which is probably what everyone was expecting to see, and we never go to, matter of fact the one scene where he was being tossed the ball (30 seconds in) was cut before the ball came into the scene. (so, I am led to believe that he dropped the ball and you didn’t want to show it, but then don’t put that scene where you say he caught the ball. The B-roll should match. Don’t get me wrong, you b-roll wasn’t all bad, but there are just certain visuals I was hoping to see and I didn’t. As for the audio, when you move in and out of B-rolls, (since many of them have different intensity levels)fade them into one another so it doesn’t come across real choppy. You can see what I mean in that sequence of b rolls that begin around 30 seconds, but even in the interview with player at 47, the b roll audio chops in and out. Don’t get me wrong, I love that you include it because it adds to the authenticity of what the viewer is seeing however, just bridge it better as you move in and out of it. I liked the idea and the story telling, just make sure your B-roll keeps up with all the other great things you do in a story.
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