The Culture Of Portillos - ID# 493

York

Natural Audio News Package

Entry Description

A newspackage about the culture of Portillos in our town and how our highschool is impacted by its presence.

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Recent Teacher Comments

• 3/1 12:39 pm - Great opening shot would have been greater with an actual patron walking through. Wasting precious video time using subjects giving their name when the text/title does the same thing. :13 - jump cut and back to i'view. and back and so on. Once you've established her on camera with first bite, don't keep going back to her talking head - just b-roll over future sound bites; the b-roll tells the story visually, not repetitive talking head use. Again, don't need second subject's name in audio; and need to go to manual iris for her i'view because the window light is causing the auto-iris function to close. Good natsot of receipt printing. Start manager i'view with yearbook shot/bite, then dissolve from yearbook to her i'view bite continuing. More jump-cuts between i'view and b-roll. Use tripod for exterior pan. Audio provided good storytelling.
• 2/25 6:50 am - The introduction was great, and overall you did a really good job with b-roll AND natural sound from those clips. The b-roll shots were a nice mix of group shots, close-ups, and extreme close ups. I'm glad you integrated the exterior shots towards the end as well. The areas for improvement would definitely be on the interviews; you needed to have a real microphone on each person being interviewed, and you needed to have lighting. The interior of the restaurant was way too dark to do interviews. Maybe if you had positioned the people closer to the windows, so the sunlight was hitting them as a key light, you could have pulled off not using lights. But in the location where you were doing the interviews, you needed more light.

Judge 1

Positives: Great opening shot to set the scene. Very visual with showing the kitchen and where all the action happens.

Improvements: More national sound pops throughout the story. Would have loved to see a tight shot of someone digging in to an Italian beef.

Judge 2

Positives: -You really nailed this as a nat pkg! You hit the purpose of having mixed nats, we never really heard the same sound twice, and you captured what portillo's really sounds like from the workers, the food sizzling, the receipt machine, etc. You got creative by weaving them throughout, fading that audio up and down so it never felt jarring. -Great shots! You got shots of the people who were talking so we could see them in their element, which is good. You also showed a variance of shots, which meant you had a high shot count and never had to repeat a shot. Each shot felt like it moved the story along.

Improvements: Ways you can take your pkg to the next level: -Your audio during the interviews was a little distracting. It was evident you didn't have a microphone close enough to the subjects, or you didn't remove the background audio layer. It made it difficult to hear at times what they were saying because the background noise was loud. -Your interviews were also in the same place with the same backgrounds. If you're going to have multiple interviews, it really adds extra elements by moving them to different background and environments, and changing up their rule of thirds.

Judge 3

Positives: The broll in this piece worked really well. I appreciate that we were able to see behind the counter at Portillos, and the shot of the fries was very dynamic. Additionally, I think the story came together well at the end--the last interview was a good bite to end on.

Improvements: The editing of this piece could be cleaned up a bit -- there is one broll shot that gets cut off in the middle of someone waving to the camera. This shot either should've been extended to let it breathe, or cut before we see him start to wave. And at the end of Rose's interview, we see her turn her head to the camera but it should cut before we see that. Additionally, I think the subtitles could've been improved. There was a lot of noise during the interviews, but that was consistent throughout the piece (which makes sense for a noisy restaurant) but some bites had subtitles and some didn't, and I don't know why.

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