Rising Cafeteria Prices - ID# 517
Maine West
News Package
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This news story is about the reasons behind rising cafeteria prices at Maine West.
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- 4/23 3:40 pm - I like that you chose a unique problem to your community to highlight. I second the comments below and do not want to be redundant. I do want to highlight that your sound and b-roll really come together as well as the variety of b-roll. Thank you for using lav/pin mics as well as tripods to create this visually strong piece. If you are an underclassman, keep making pieces. If you are a senior, I wish you the best in your future and congratulations!
- 3/16 8:12 pm - You set up your story well telling your audience what it was all about, and what to expect which was good, but was also the part of the story I didn’t like. When you do that there is a lot of redundancy in the story. For example, at 1:35 you say with the increased prices students are still willing to buy. Then you cut to an interview, where you ask are you still willing to buy, and the student replies with yes even though they are high I still will buy. You basically told us that in your transition, so make sure the interview goes deeper than it did maybe tell me why they would still buy, lack of choices, they like the food…. There were other parts of redundancy in your story, I feel like I heard 3 times about the increased price of Pepsi products. In professional news reporting there usually is not a lot of time so you have to choose your words carefully, and one way to minimize a long story is to try and avoid redundancy and make your point. I found other areas of your story good, I appreciated you interviewed a variety of people, students, quest manager, director of finance, I would just make sure you know what each person is adding to the story, it seems like you asked the same broad question to each person which is why they all kind of said the same things (which brings me back to the redundancy). The quest interview went on a little bit long, partially because he talked a little slow, but I would have looked for ways to either edit him down, or insert and related / supporting interview for what he was saying in the middle of him to break him up. Generally, I thought your broll was shot well, and matched up well. Be careful with your audio levels, it seemed some interviews were louder than others. I think you have a handle on the technical parts of a news story, work on the writing and planning out your questions better, and I think you see a big improvement with your next news story.
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