Dinnertime - ID# 534
Glenbrook North
Dramatic Narrative
Entry Description
A young man prepares himself a feast.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 3/16 7:55 pm - I recall seeing this at the silent film festival, and feeling like many of your shots were too long, you seemed to have shortened it which I think was an improvement because it moved the story along quicker. I know it is supposed to be a little bit more of a suspense, but at times it got in the way of understanding the story, because you would provide clues that I felt were confusing, so rather than feeling a twist at the end, I was more confused because I didn’t feel like all the pieces fit together. I thought your music choice was a great way to set the tone throughout the piece, you also had a lot of good creative shots and close ups which kept the video looking fresh. Black and white was a nice eerie effect Anytime you could show it, I would rather that type it out. So, you used the word AGHHHH across the screen, I thought you could have communicated so much more feeling, fear etc., by seeing that across someone’s face. Finally, I Couldn’t get past the idea that at the beginning end he wasn’t really digging which made the video seem less believable, because I never really saw any dirt being thrown each time the shovel went into the ground. Unless that was intentional, in which case I don’t get it then.
- 3/10 11:13 am - Positives: Opening title shot against the front of an oven works very well-- I didn't notice it until the 2nd time through! Story effectively flips between 2 realities. Nice bookending of the back yard digging shot, with the hand included at the end (although the "shoveling" was unconvincing.. Areas for improvement: It could work without the text, "AH" (which is a bit distracting), if he had the shocked look as soon as he looked back at the platter after taking off the apron--the sound effects support him freaking out at that point if it was edited tighter.
- 3/9 7:34 pm - good variety of shots; did not look like anything was truly shoveled at the end
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