GBN Boys Bowling - ID# 591

Glenbrook North

News Package

Entry Description

In this package, we take a look at the Glenbrook North Boys Bowling Team. This team is lesser known compared to more popular sports like football and basketball, but in their short few years as an official team, they have racked up quite the success. We also take a look at how the bond between team members is special and how it contributes to their great success as a program.

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Recent Teacher Comments

• 4/23 7:35 pm - I like that you chose a unique topic to your community to highlight. I second the comments below and do not want to be redundant. This was one of my favorite pieces. As league bowler myself, I really enjoyed this piece. I like the framing of your subjects as well as unique perspective with b-roll. Nicely done. If you are an underclassman, keep making pieces. If you are a senior, I wish you the best in your future and congratulations!
• 3/16 8:21 pm - I love your introduction in the beginning, you really set up the story well. I can see some intentional writing. Loved the diversity of shots considering there is only so much you can do in a bowling alley. And, the shots that you have don’t seem haphazard I can see you tried to frame each one as best as you can. Great camera work. Your B-roll fit where you could make it (team getting along, individual attention, helping younger ones learn the craft etc.). It wasn’t randomly placed it all seemed to fit together nice job with that. Watch the interview audio levels, it seemed like they were all over. For example, Simon seemed to come in a little hot I thought your story flowed really well, I wasn’t left with any questions about this team, I feel like I learned about the culture of the teammates and the team itself and I think you had a great cast of characters (I think you did a great job coaching the coach interviews so he would look good on tv).  Great planning for this story, it was evident in the writing and transitions between interviews

Judge 1

Positives: - Natural sound off the top! It's tremendous. And you did a great job of keeping it going underneath your track throughout the piece. Great work! - I think it's clear you thought about your shot composition in this piece, and I enjoy the variety. The close up of the pins, the interaction between teammates, the depth of field on your interviews. All good stuff!

Improvements: - When you have a story rich with natural sound, use it and use it often! News directors will tell you there's no such thing as too much natural sound. It's a great way to transition in either a long part of reporter track, or from soundbite to soundbite. - While your shot variation is great, the sequencing could be better. Try to think action-reaction. For example, you have some great shots of bowlers approaching the lane and throwing their ball. Use that, then cut to a ball rolling down the lane, cut to the ball striking the pins, cut to their reaction. This will flow so nicely, and it makes a big difference.

Judge 2

Positives: great quick nat pop to start the pkg. The story flowed well and incorporated great sound. I was interested and engaged. Broll matched well with describing team and mentorship.

Improvements: A bowling alley is a hard background with lighting and natural sound. Some of the interviews are a bit noisy with the bowling background. Can you remove or take down the 2nd channel of audio on those? I felt like some of the interviews were yelling at me. Were you trying to do a rack focus on the closeup of bowlers? The alley was clear but the bowlers a bit blurry? The white background on the lanes was really fighting with your camera. As was the darker area where everyone was standing

Judge 3

Positives: -Story was well written and narrated -I liked the variety of shots used... it showed me a lot of thought and time went into them.

Improvements: -Try to use more natural sound to tell your story. Use the sound of the bowling balls clicking in between the reporter's track. -It would've been nice to see a reporter do a stand-up to establish who is telling the story... if no time for a stand-up, then a cutaway with the reporter interviewing a subject would work.

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