4/29 8:15 pm - I think this was a little too long. Make it thirty seconds and have the voiceover come in quicker. Find some different angles and close-ups for your shots and use some lighting to give it a different feel.
2/25 1:43 pm - Overall the commercial lacks a coherent story. You need to work on dramatic lighting for workout videos. Some of the most cinematic commercials are done in the gym setting. Jump on YouTube and check out a couple examples of some commercials for either a workout supplement or a workout equipment and you'll see. Work on the voice over as well. Voice overs in commercials should be flawless