Detective [REDACTED] and ??? - ID# 264

Marist

Comedic Narrative

Entry Description

A useless assistant, a dead body and a mysterious hallucinogenic spray all give our top detective a day he won't soon forget. All royalty free music courtesy of WeVideo.

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Recent Teacher Comments

• 4/29 1:36 pm - Fun concept, especially with the internal dialogue which seemed to have a lot of the humor. That’s hard to convey the comedy through internal dialogue. Nice work with the fight scene at the end too. Just need to clear up some of the dialogue and storytelling to make it move a bit faster, vary the shots, and build the tension in a way the audience knows where it’s going.
• 4/27 10:58 am - Successful - A lot of creative ideas and a unique concept. Some funny dialogue. Needs Work - This was probably too long and needs a tighter structure. There's too much here - either it should be trimmed down to a simpler story or expanded to something longer. Right now it's somewhere in between and leaves us with a confusing ending.
• 2/22 1:08 pm - Interesting concept. Color is a little blue or orange at times. The shot with the shoes in the foreground is visually interesting. Not really sure if I personally understand the humor, but comedy is in the eye of the beholder.

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