Come Out and Play - ID# 333

Bremen

Music Video

Entry Description

Just as the holiday season kicks in, Joey is met with the hardships of who he really is and has trouble expressing himself. He starts to make an attempt of expressing himself hoping that he can escape this feeling of being trapped. Watch as Joey learns to overcome this and love himself for who he is even when others don’t.

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Recent Teacher Comments

• 4/30 8:32 am - Love the on the beat editing. Probs my favorite part. Your story was strong and powerful, and I love that. There was one part where the the window scene faded into you sitting, or something to that effect, and that felt a little bit off to me, but I loved how your other shots look and were set up. Very good music video.
• 3/12 3:58 pm - Clean close ups to begin, I like the ornament breaking, loved the boca effect with the coffee drinking, good casting with his acting - subtle/real, quick cuts being tied up was cool, on beat editing - nice, POV shot from the paper on the floor - also nice. I like that you hide the love interest...just wondering if you considered showing them or their body earlier in the video.

Judge 1

Positives: The narrative worked well with your visuals. It seems like you put some thought into how to visually express emotions. I enjoyed your work with the christmas lights, and the extreme wide shots of the house across the way. These things helped set the tone and connect the imagery to the song.

Improvements: I would have liked to her some practical sound. A lot of the shots were straight on. I would suggest experimenting with more high and low angle shots. Over all well done!

Judge 2

Positives: THIS VIDEO IS AWESOME. One thing that worked well was that you kept the story going all the way through to the very end. So many times a story will reach it's logical conclusion and there'll be no more relevant info for viewer to consume... and there's still a whole minute left! Music videos are tricky. You have strictly stylistic ones that just want to keep your eyes busy the whole time and you have ones with a story. If you go story, it better be a good one. And yours is. Start to finish I wanted to know what was going to happen next. Always keep them wanting to know what happens next! I have a bunch of things I could say that worked... but one of my favorites was your mise-en-scène. Now, that's a fancy film school word for "everything you see on screen" but that's the best way I could describe what it is that I'm talking about. Your visuals were varied and unique and CLOSE and colorful and stylistic... you could watch this video without music and it would be interesting and you'd get it.

Improvements: Your pacing in the first scene up until the chorus could use some work. It's very... rugged. The shots all seem to be about the same length. The rack focus was a great but you could have milked that for another second or two. Minor things. I'd love to see more movement. I assume you were doing a lot of this by yourself? Setting up your shot then acting in it? I do that too! I'm the only crew member I trust! Well, in editing, you can start messing with the size and placement of your image. Check some tutorials on youtube about resizing and you'll see there's a ton of things you can add after the fact. Subtle zooms, tiny pans... it all adds up. All in all this was a fantastic music video. You could 100% direct movies one day if you kept at it. Make a bunch more of these. Get better every time. Work with other people. Learn new skills. You got it. Keep at it.

Judge 3

Positives: I really love the story. Genuinely moving and heartfelt. Acting was terrific as well. I liked the editing touches, where you used cuts to highlight percussive elements in the song.

Improvements: I really lost track of the geography in the climax of the video. I had to watch it again, and it still wasn't clear. It looks like the person in the white sweatshirt went into the same house the hero came out of. And it wasn't clear if the hero was across the street at the house he was staring at. As a result, a pretty crucial story point is lost here--especially given the possible resonance in the title of the song, "Come Out..." Minor thing--I don't love interlaced video. Best left for newscasts and sporting events. Use progressive setting on stuff you shoot that's supposed to look cinematic.

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