How To Make Apple Pie - ID# 98
Oak Forest
Demonstration
Entry Description
A step by step process on how to make homemade apple pie.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/19 7:53 pm - POSITIVES: Nice warm opening shot! Nice editing that shows the steps without showing the entire process. Good variety of camera angles and great pacing. SUGGESTIONS: Warmer color correction would support the feeling of yummy apple pie... blueish tones might have been caused by your room lighting.
Judge 1
Positives: Good use of text graphics. Good "natural" sound during demo. Clear succession of method.
Improvements: Lighting could be better. Some things are to see clearly. Too many "you will then" lines in script. Gets too repetitive.
Judge 2
Positives: I really like the variety of shots showing the viewer what they need for the process. Great job using the nat sound in the process. There are times that nat sound is neglected. Your process is obvious and makes it easy to follow.
Improvements: It would help if you watched the levels of your music. There are times that it becomes distracting to your message. There are. A couple of times during the video that your voice-over changes level, this can be a distraction. When delivering a message, your audio needs to be consistent as not to offer a distraction.
Judge 3
Positives: The demonstration shots varied in angle and presentation, and that worked well. I have traveled all over the country trying apple pie at different restaurants, and I will make this recipe and see how it stacks up. Nice job.
Improvements: Used the phrase "you will then..." too often and it became a little distracting. Just as the video transitions varied well, it is important to vary the sentence openers in instruction points.
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