Escape The Nightmare - ID# 139
Morton East
Dramatic Narrative
Entry Description
A high school student falls asleep in his last class, finding himself in an eerie situation in which he must escape. Paid Lifetime Blanket License to Production Garden Music.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/28 9:19 am - Works Well - Fun concept and creative situations. The running effect was really cool. Good use of filters and effects. Needs Work - Even though it was a dream sequence, it was a little too random. It would have been interesting to connect the dream to his waking life a bit more. Also, nothing really happens in the dream, which results in this film not having much dramatic structure. The voice effect was a little hard to understand.
- 4/27 2:22 pm - This was very fun! I wanted to see more. I would have liked to have stayed in the dream world for another minute or so. Keep up the good work with the special effects. What needed work: It is sometimes difficult to hear what they say. Especially with your characters wearing masks, recording ADR (automated dialogue replacement) would have made a big difference. 2:06 - A close up would have been a more compelling shot here. The color/contrast during the reality sequences was a bit flat. I would suggest spending more time on color grading/correcting during post-production or trying out using lights to help create contrast between your characters and their backgrounds. What worked: The black and white was a good way to differentiate between the dream and reality. The SFX were very fun – I enjoyed them a lot. I also appreciated the transition to the dream sequence at 0:20 and the Dutch angles throughout.
- 4/13 1:12 pm - The jump scare in this film really got me! I like the idea of how your story transitions into a dream that the audience follows. The only part that I was confused about was where does Kermit the Frog come from? Does he have some kind of symbolism that adds to the story, or is Kermit just a part of a class joke? I’m not quite sure. Most of your sound is pretty audible. I mention below the voice effect that was added in. I think most scenes were lit well. This film was more contrasted and darker than others. Which is totally okay since that’s probably what you were going for. One thing that you could’ve done is turn off the lights in the hallway (if possible) and a singular light on the dark figure. I feel like this would make this scene a lot creepier than it already is. I wish there would just be a few more closeups of the main character in the hallway! Your editing flowed really well! 0:23 - This is a great edit to imply that the audience is now seeing what the main character is dreaming about. Changing the color of the film to black and white also helps show the audience that this is now that character’s dream. Great job! 0:41 - It’s an interesting choice to turn the brightness on the lights on and off. It works well since it gives off a “creepy” feeling. 0:50 - Great decision here to place the camera at an angle. Doing this really gives the unpleasant and uneasy feeling just like in a horror movie! 0:54 - I would love to see a closeup of the character’s face when he shrugs. Close ups give the audience insight to how the character is feeling. They also help the audience develop a connection to your character since they can visually see the facial expressions in a close up. 1:05 - Great editing here. This is like a jump scare which really got me! 1:42 - I like how you use the voice effect here, however, it is a little tough to understand what is being said. This did distract me from the story as I was trying to rewatch and listen to what was being said. Maybe lowering the effect or changing the pitch would help the audio be more audible.
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