From Pain to Hope - ID# 140
Maine West
Documentary
Entry Description
This is a documentary about Reese Capper's journey with juvenile diabetes. Music: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=C0gawrDiLwo https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hoCeLNxr1a4 https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vJOzeIET0Gk https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XQv0VMqNnf4
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/10 9:12 pm - KEEPERS: Really well done piece on a child's journey through some difficult circumstances. Excellent framing of your interviews and the use of lighting. Sound quality of the interviews was great. Even though you only had photos to work with for your broll, you did well in crafting the story using those photos. All of them were different and helped us visualize the story well. Really good work! That many photos and manipulating them like you did is tedious and time consuming. Good stuff! IMPROVEMENTS: Vary the speed of your photo movements (Ken Burns Effects). At times it felt like they moved too quickly and the movements were all similar. Vary the speeds according to the emotional beat of the piece a that moment. Sometimes it felt like they needed to slow down a bit. The piece suffers a bit due to the photo-only broll. Obviously, you're telling a story after the fact but getting a hold of some video footage from the family would have upped the production value and given the viewer something different to look at. It would also give you some natural sound to break up the interview-only audio. In terms or the interview shots, why not film Reese somewhere else? Perhaps her room? Treat your interviewees like characters, because they are characters in their own story. So give them backgrounds and surroundings that suit them. It also gives the audience something different to look at. In terms of music, I think you needed a different song at the beginning of the piece. The first song is really depressing and sad. I would have used that after the diagnosis was made and they're talking about the difficulties involving treatments. For the beginning, it's okay to go with something a bit lighter there. Your ending text should probably be done in a different font. That particular font is a bit tough to read. It works for a lower third, but for sharing general information, you're better off with something a bit less "scripty." Overall, good work!
Judge 1
Positives: Nice job storytelling here! I knew within the first four seconds of this piece, the "ride" you were going to take me on. A mother dealing with something being wrong with her daughter. I like how we learn about Reese's struggles, cure and how the family turned their misfortune into a positive! Nice use of natural light through the windows for your interviews.
Improvements: The best way to get shallow depth of field for our interview look is by use all of the depth you can. Try moving your subject away from the shelving/hutch behind them so the back ground gets nice and soft and drops off. Try making your moves on the pictures a little more subtle.
Judge 2
Positives: Dramatic use of the music. Good pacing.
Improvements: The music volume is a bit overwhelming at times. I think this story is about juvenile arthritis, not diabetes.
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