Koaster Kids - ID# 180

Wheaton Academy
News Package
Entry Description

How one guy is helping thousands overcome their fears

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Recent Teacher Comments

  • 4/29 8:56 am -
  • 4/29 8:56 am - This is a fantastic story with interesting balance between facts/feelings. The reporter narration feels a little lost, almost like they're just winging it (even though I assume they were not). The soundbite if framed well and executed fantastic. I love this story and how is keeps going and I keep learning.
  • 3/11 9:53 am - Liked the package concept, good story, good characters, the tracking voice needs development
Judge 1

Positives: - Your interview and standup framing were great. You nailed the rule of thirds on the interviews, and I like how your standup was centered, using the roller coaster as a backdrop. Well done! - I'm glad you were able to incorporate some of his videos showing the kids giving their ratings and riding roller coasters. It definitely adds to the story.

Improvements: - This story really could have benefited from the use of natural sound. When I think of roller coasters, I think of people screaming, the sounds of the coaster going down the tracks, etc. That would have been great to include, because it helps show how these kids are overcoming their fears. - Try to pick shorter, more concise soundbites. The ones you picked are fine, but they kind of drag on, and it slows down the pace of your story.

Judge 2

Positives: Great framing and lighting on your interview with Logan Good use of broll from youtube. I also like how you were smart of blurred certain comments while highlighting others. Always need to be careful with social media posts and making sure everything on screen is appropriate

Improvements: Slow down when you're tracking your pkg. You don't need to be slow, but stop speed reading. Breathe and relax. This piece was a bit long. Possible shorten a few sots. Would have loved to hear a nat pop from one of the youtube videos

Judge 3

Positives: -narrated well, good delivery -interviews shot well

Improvements: -Some of the audio under the reporter track is too loud. -would be great to use some of the natural sound in between tracks

Judge 4

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