Leave it all on the track - ID# 181
Wheaton Academy
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Entry Description
Matt Novak follows his lifelong passion of racing
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/29 7:59 am - Great nat sound at the start, but you don't have to say "we sat down" as that isn't necessary to say. I would try to lead into the soundbites with more of a tease as opposed to a generic drop. The character is interesting. I think the reporter could add more info. This feels like it's too much of just this one person being interviewed. The b-roll is nice. I would like to see more than just in car footage. Maybe this guy around the garage working on the car.
- 3/11 9:44 am - Fun story, good nats, nice video from inside the car angle but needed more shots from outside and varying shots. Needed more voices and perspectives in the package and the standup didn't seem to fit the mood of the piece.
Judge 1
Positives: - I love that you included the natural sound from the camera inside his car to start the package. That is an awesome way to really set the stage for the story you're about to tell. - You did a great job framing up his interview. Good work with the rule of thirds.
Improvements: - On a story like this, where there's a lot of opportunity for natural sound, I was hoping to hear more of it. It may not have been available this time, but I would have liked you to meet him at a track or in the garage while working on a car. That video will do more for your story than just pictures. - When considering soundbites, you want to pick quotes that are more subjective than objective. You can write about his introduction to racing. Let him tell the parts of the story that you can't write better than him.
Judge 2
Positives: Good open with nats Good using broll and pictures to cover the long sots Good to allow him to tell the story and not just tracking the whole thing
Improvements: You don't always have to do a standup. If you were at the race track and had something to show us then definitely do the standup. This could have used a little more nats. You opened great, but then that's all we heard. I would shorten this a little. Your interviewee seemed a little timid and rigid in front of the camera. Maybe shorten some of the later sots
Judge 3
Positives: -written and narrated well -great use of natural sound
Improvements: -would’ve liked to see more shots of Matthew behind the wheel -saw of a few jump cuts between video clips that are too similar. Transitions could help with those jump cuts… or try to use different angles to avoid them
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