Baseball & Softball Get Turf - ID# 20
Homewood-Flossmoor
News Package
Entry Description
News story on how the two teams' fields are under construction for artificial turf.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/29 8:02 am - I like the opening stand-up and you pay off the fact that there is snow behind you by explaining the relevance. This is a great job of see-say, meaning we hear you saying something and we see video to support the story. I like L cuts in news packages and you started the soundbite before we saw the coach which I think makes it feel more professional. The coach interview needed to use the rule of 3rds as he is staring directly into the camera. Try to hide the lav mic. The player interview used rule of 3rds, but seems to still be staring into the camera.
- 3/11 9:45 am - Very informative, good visuals, good interviews and relevant story. The soundbites were a bit too long and not enough nats. Tracking voice needs some developing.
Judge 1
Positives: - This story is so visually appealing! I love the drone shots. They really set the stage for your story. The depth of field you have on your interviews is also awesome. It's clear you thought about how to tell this visually, and that really paid off. - Your standups were great too. You drew me in running through the problems the new field will alleviate. That's a great way to write.
Improvements: - For news stories, having your interviews look right into the camera is a bit awkward. Next time, line them up on one of the vertical lines for the rule of thirds and have them look across the camera. So, for example, if they're on the right third of the screen, have them looking toward the left side of the screen. - The only thing this story is really missing is natural sound. This is a construction story, so I know those machines were loud and likely making beeping noises. Incorporating little bits of that sound helps the viewer understand what's going on and really adds some depth.
Judge 2
Positives: I love that you had broll of the project and work being completed Great lighting on your interview with Coach McCarthy Nice interview in front of a window. That can be difficult to shoot with the light, but you made it look good You told a great story. I like how you got perspective from the coaches as well as the players
Improvements: I understand it was cold outside, but wear gloves and take your hands out of your pockets. It gives you a bigger presence. It's okay to take up space and own your standup. Also, it's okay to dress for the weather. As a reporter, you'll be outside all weather. I'm also curious about your necklace, so I looked up what it meant. You want your story to be the focus, not your outfit. You don't have to include Mr. on your name banners. Their title is coach and you've included that on the second line. Did you have any broll of these poor weather conditions? Maybe get some pictures from the coaches or players. That was the only thing I was waiting for the whole time.
Judge 3
Positives: -good use of interview sound to help tell the story. -diverse use of shots and sequences helped make story visually appealing
Improvements: -would’ve liked to hear Nat sound in between tracks -try to hide the lavaliere mic cord when interviewing subjects.
Judge 4
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