Proof of Residency - ID# 247
Highland Park
Dramatic Narrative
Entry Description
Memories of fonder times are recounted through the examination of eleven items salvaged from a house fire.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/28 6:14 pm - What works: "Up in flames" matches well with the burnt items. The composition of the images is very impressive. Overall, this is a mournful piece that conveys so much emotion. It is clearly directed and very professional. The final "humble home" line ties everything together very well. Many students put little to no thought into the credit sequences, so I especially appreciate the creativity of the ending credits. What needed work: I have few to no negative feedback for such a personal and poetic work. It is a tight and impressive piece! Final thoughts: This is a beautiful poem and work of art. It is somewhat heartbreaking, and entirely impressive. I strongly suggest creating a Filmfreeway account and submitting this under the experimental category in other film festivals. It is also worth sharing in modern/performative art circles. Excellent job!
- 4/28 9:30 am - Works Well - Clearly a very personal and powerful piece. Interesting and well-composed photographs. Good choice of music. Cool fire imagery at the end. Needs Work - This fits more into an “experimental” category than “dramatic narrative. It works fine as a visual poem, but it has no dramatic structure.
- 4/27 8:50 pm - This is truly an experimental piece and I love seeing these! Now because this is more experimental, I realize that this is a film that doesn’t include much of the traditional camera shots. And that’s okay! You could use other methods of adding more to your film. For example, when you talk about certain items, maybe we hear SFX in the background of something related to that item. For example: The marriage certificate going up in flames - maybe we hear fighting or an argument quietly in the background. I think one thing that you could work on is the audio of the voice over. It is a great voice over, but sometimes the “pops” can be distracting from what is being said. Even though you have pretty similar camera shots throughout, you still manage to change it up by getting closer to an object. For example: we see the full shot of the close at 2:20 and then we get a CU of it. I think your shots are very well lit. Another thing that can be worked on is editing. You already do a great job with it, but paying attention to little details is important. You have a few flash frames that appear and they could also be distracting to the viewer. Overall, I really enjoyed watching this experimental piece! 0:19 - Watch out when you say “p” into the microphone. You can hear the air blow across the microphone which makes that “pop” sound. Something to help with this is potentially moving away from the microphone or adding a pop filter if you have one available. Your music choice does not distract from the narration! I really enjoyed the soundtrack! 2:09 and 2:22 - There are flash frames here. I would suggest completely watching back your full edit and double checking it. You could even have someone else watch it before you fully export the project.
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