Bowling News Package - ID# 276
York
News Package
Entry Description
An update on a high school bowling team's season.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/29 8:39 am - Great nat sound open. In bowling, you can get a lot of tight shots. I feel like maybe we settled with medium and wide too much and try to avoid pan shots. The narration was interesting sounding but make sure to put info in there other than just saying we are about to hear from someone. Great job on rule of 3rds and technically executing. Lighting is hard at a bowling alley, you did it well. I love the tight framing of the interviews.
Judge 1
Positives: - I like how you started and ended the piece with natural sound. A bowling alley is a place full of noise, and using that to help tell your story is a great decision. - The framing of your interviews was excellent. You mastered the rule of thirds, and you used the background to add to your story. Well done!
Improvements: - Some of the soundbites you used didn't really add to your story, and stacking them slowed down the pace. Try to pick the best ones and then weave your reporter track in between. Even adding more natural sound would help! - I was hoping for more shots when it comes to sequencing. When you know someone will be doing the same thing over and over again, try to get a variety of wide, medium and tight shots of different parts of the process. This will allow you to cut together the entire sequence with different viewpoints, and that's where editing really adds to a story like this.
Judge 2
Positives: Good use of nats to start the pkg. It sets the scene for where you are and what you're about to discuss I like how you used some broll to cover longer sots Cool story showcasing a sport that doesn't always get the top coverage. That's quite a large team! Hopefully you were able to follow up on their season.
Improvements: It can be hard to hear people when they're wearing masks. During your interview with the coach, the nats were a little high at times. You might need to bring that day and bring up the coach audio to understand her better. The nats there were a little distracting. Think about mixing sots. You don't have to do all player then all coach. It's okay to mix it up. The nats really sold your pkg. I would have loved if you let the chant play full at 1:38 before your sig out. You could even split your sig out. nats, name, nats, signing off. You sound a little timid in your track. Own your voice and speak boldly. If you have a story to tell, we want to hear it.
Judge 3
Positives: -great use of natural sound to drive the piece -shot well, lots of creative angles.
Improvements: -some of the audio transitions were a bit jumpy -would avoid doing pans for too long. Sequences to transition between shots would be ideal
Judge 4
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