Shack Promo - ID# 287

Wheaton Academy
School Promotion
Entry Description

Promoting the school's brand new food truck - run by students, for the students

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Recent Teacher Comments

  • 4/25 10:34 am - Really interesting topic! Nice beauty shots of the food you feature. Some variety of exterior shots of the truck, but they're used again within the piece which gets repetitive. The shots INSIDE the truck are great--could have used more of that, as well as showing students enjoying the food. Great intro and outro and titles!
  • 4/8 12:56 pm - 0:56 interview subject's sentence looks like it cut off; great, differentiated shots of the truck, and way to include the different types of food provided
  • 3/7 10:10 am - I really enjoyed this and your idea. Good job showing us the Shack Bus and showing us how it came about and what's inside. I like that you have different foods on the menu that are even named after people the students know. You did a great job advertising it, having background music to go along with it and I like how you came from above and brought us down to it. Just a good job overall!
Judge 1

Positives: nice drone shot on exit scene enjoyed the circling of the truck in anticipation of entering it

Improvements: more preparation for interview describing the food truck by the student text over the top highlighting hours and menu choices

Judge 2

Positives: I loved the aerial shots. That adds a lot to your production. The concept of "The Shack" is very cool. It's impressive that the idea came from students and that it is run by students. The food shots are well composed and make the food look appetizing which is a big part of the message.

Improvements: The audio needs a little work. The opening V.O. is very clean and was recorded appropriately. However, when Jack is talking it sounds as if he is in a crowded room instead of standing alone and outdoors. If this was an audio mix consider finding sounds that will match the environment.

Judge 3

Positives: I like the tracking shots. They add a lot of depth to the promo. Good job highlighting why students should use the shack.

Improvements: The script seems to get repetitive. I know that can be helpful for promos, but in this case, it was too much. The audio with Jack is not direct and it picks up a lot of sounds. There are shakey shots. Try to quicken the pacing of your edits.

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