Painter - ID# 39

Glenbrook South
Comedic Narrative
Entry Description

A careless painter slips up on the job and is forced to make a decision between fleeing the scene or owning up to his mistake. De Wolf Music

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  • 4/27 11:01 am - Overall, this was a great video. The prominent feature was the pace of both the editing and the acting, it all worked effectively to heighten the sense of urgency and build the drama while also highlighting the absurdity and humor. My biggest critique is that the story fell flat at the end, with the abrupt ending and lacking a resolve to what was a great build-up with some creative shots. On a technical note, some of the audio was leveled too high at times, so just listen for those points and work levels one last time before export. All in all, you took on a fun project that appears to be well-planned and executed, nice work!
  • 2/24 2:48 pm - STORY: I liked the set up here with the painter being a bit careless, and how you consistently showed this throughout the entire piece. CAMERA: shot variety and composition were excellent! Great use of a variety of different eye level and low angle shots, smooth camera movements, and nicely framed compositions. Nice mix of extreme close ups, close ups, medium shots, full shots, over the shoulder, point of view. Your use of depth of field also shows a higher level of proficiency. EDITING: great pace for the entire project, and some very nice edits between shots for the beginning exterior scene and the shots of the painter fleeing the scene. LIGHTING: Looks like you relied on the available lighting on location, which is fine because you clearly know how to manage your exposure using ISO, shutter speed, and aperture. AUDIO: Most of the audio was a nice mix of the natural ambient noise of each space and whatever sounds were part of the scene. When you kicked in his music (when he put in his ear buds), it was a little bit louder than I was expecting, so make sure you watch your audio levels.
Judge 1

Positives: Nice job establishing the Painter's personality (careless) at the top of the piece. Fun choice to include no dialogue, and a really great job moving use from beat to beat, cause to effect.

Improvements: Not certain what caused him to change his mind at the end and fess up. He found the note sooo... she knows he was in the house? He's a good person...? Unclear there. He's a good performer, would have enjoyed seeing a little more chaos in the house or in his escape. So, he broke the vase? Great - let's see him deal with that a bit more BEFORE he runs. He's running and hiding? Another good place to mine for more comedic performance.

Judge 2

Positives: The story is simple, not over complicated and easy to follow! It conveyed the full arch of the character of the painter and that was so fun to watch him give in to his guilt and have a genuine transformation. Thats difficult to do in a short amount of time and without really saying anything. Well done! You also mixed in the audio element well as he listens to music which was a very neat element to play with. The shot button at the end of this sketch was also perfect! Well done there.

Improvements: The character is a bit overexposed outside. This is a tough one to really nail because white is such a hard color to light for so I get that struggle, especially being out in the sun. From a story perspective the only thing I wish would have been different is if the vase would have fallen over because of something he did the first time. I love the catch but then it sort of just falls as an act of chance. I think even having him bump into it would make the piece a bit more powerful, but I think there's likely a more creative way to do it. Maybe something with the tape or the ladder. Just a small change I think that would help, but other than that great work!

Judge 3

Positives: I really appreciated the effective simplicity of the narrative, and that the film was able to accomplish all of it without any dialogue. Love the musical transition. Great shot of the vase catch. The moment when he trips and sees the crumpled up note from the homeowner was well done all-around and functioned well as a turning point for the character in this simple narrative. Very funny ending with the shot of the vase once again falling apart.

Improvements: I think the film could use one or two additional side gags to keep the comedy element consistent. It is a very straightforward plot so you'd have to be careful that whatever you choose to include reinforces the main story. Nitpick, but wouldn't the homeowner have seen the painter's car parked in the driveway when she arrived?

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