The Missing Link - ID# 73
Marist
Dramatic Narrative
Entry Description
Music from Youtube Audio Library The Empty Moons of Jupiter - DivKid Dead Forest - Brian Bolger Three Friends hang out and one goes missing. Two friends must tell what happened the night she went missing. Or they are next.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/28 3:00 pm - What worked: The dialogue felt believable, and the acting was very good. I really like the intentional movement of the shot at 1:08. The music complimented the drama of the story. What needed work: 0:12 - There was a jump cut. The audio cuts needed more work. Editing with J and L cuts would make a big difference for the audio. 1:26 – the camera operator is visible in the mirror. The ending was confusing and abrupt. I don't understand why Princess showed up and then told them not to say anything. A lot of shots are out of focus. Final thoughts: Overall, the story was a bit confusing and there were technical issues, but the film did a good job of leaning into the drama.
- 4/28 9:27 am - Works Well - The concept is interesting and the actors hold the audience’s attention. The handheld camera works well to add to the mood of the story. Good choice of music. Needs Work - “Three friends hanging out” and “the next day” titles are not needed because we see everything we need to know in the shots. The cheesy transitions do not fit the mood of the film at all. Basic cuts and fades would be much better. The film ends very suddenly, right at the climax. It feels like there should be a bit more story to wrap things up.
- 4/27 2:18 pm - You have an interesting cliffhanger at the end of your story! I think you have a great story, but it is a little difficult to follow because of the audio. Most editors agree that your overall audio level of your audio mix (all of your audio combined) should fall between -10db to -20db (db = decibels). When editing, listen back to your edit with headphones to make sure that you can clearly hear everything. I think your editing has a good pace to it. It definitely helps lead the story forward. I like how you used text as some of your transitions. A quick tip, if you start doing that you should be consistent with that throughout your film. Most of your shots were pretty well lit. I’m not sure, but I think this was all shot on a phone. It’s great that you used your phone because it is a powerful tool! You have a lot of good SFX that you use. The definitely add and uneasy feeling to your film! 0:04 - I would suggest using a tripod here. Placing the camera on a tripod gives you more time to think about the shots, and slows you down (in a good way). You get more time to think about the shot that you are filming and you can really think about techniques (rule of thirds, golden rule, how is the lighting affecting the frame, white balance, etc). 0:26 - I like how you use the text as the transition! 0:43 - It’s very hard to hear the second character in this clip. Also, make sure to frame both of your subjects in the shot so that the audience can see them. 0:48 - Great tracking shot! One thing that could be improved in this shot is the “shaky-ness”. When doing this you really want to be careful with how you’re holding the camera. If you don’t have a stabilizer, the best way to do this is to hold the camera to your body with your elbows tucked into your sides. You also want to take the same footsteps with your character at the same time so that the camera “bounce” matches the character. 0:57 - Good use of SFX here!
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