Goodnight and Goodbye - ID# 177
Neuqua Valley
Dramatic Narrative
Entry Description
A woman notices strange behavior in her boyfriend, After a moment of realization, she figures out what has been happening all along.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/27 5:31 pm - The music and its relationship to the montages are so effective. I normally would emphasize the importance of still capturing onset sound or adding Foley, but the "silent film" style is so effective that I actually fully support the omission of a more robust sound design. It is quite impressive how much story is told in such a short period of time – this was enhanced by the strong acting performances and attention to makeup and design. While the camerawork is a bit shaky and the exposure is sometimes a tad off, the style is so consistent that, again, I have to support it! Overall, the story and style remind me of Amelie, the Artist, Pixar shorts, and the opening in Up. I really enjoyed this. The voice and story are so clear – heartwarming, funny, and moving. You stayed true to both the Silent Film and RomCom genres, while really being unique. You are very talented storytellers. I hope to see more of your work in future film festivals!
- 3/3 10:26 am - Story: Your story is great! We see the full circle of emotions from your characters and we return back to the bench at the end of your film. Great storytelling choices overall! Sound: Overall I would like to hear the natural audio of some conversations as well as sounds from our everyday lives. It would add more to your film rather than just having music and no other sound at all. Hearing those conversations and words said between characters also allows your audience to connect with those characters. It doesn't have to be for every scene that we hear these conversations, but maybe just a few. I would especially love to hear what was said when the couple argued at 1:30. Camera: You demonstrate some great camera work at times, like at 1:56. Great shot! I also love how we don’t see the boyfriend in the mirror at 1:51. I think you can still improve upon a few things. Make sure that your shots are in focus. At 1:26, the shot is just slightly out of focus on the main character. Your opening shot was overexposed. If your camera was set to auto, the camera was probably trying to adjust. If set to manual, make sure that you are paying attention to not only aperture, but shutter speed and ISO. Lighting: You used the lighting that was available to you. There were times where some of your shots were overexposed (light the left side of the frame at 0:41) and your opening shot. Editing: You had great pacing throughout your film. You made a great choice to show the boyfriend disappearing from her memories. This helped push your story forward! What was your decision on not including sound from the conversations throughout the film?
- 2/23 12:11 pm - Camera: nice camera work, clean shots and compositions. Proficient visual storytelling. Lighting: lighting was decent, but it looked like you mostly used whatever lighting was available in the locations you used. Additional lighting might have helped in a few of the scenes, to make a deeper image. Everything kind of looked flat. Sound: the music bed was fine and it fit the scenes pretty well, but it also made this seem kind of like a music video instead of a full film. Some dialogue or additional sound elements would have helped make this seem like more of film. Editing: The editing and the pacing were solid. The end sequence where the guy is erased from each of the scenes was a clever way to show her mind unraveling. Story: great story; you did a wonderful job of telling a complete story with full resolution. I loved that in the end, everything came full circle back to the bench. Well done!
Judge 1
Positives: • Really digging the concept & execution - especially the plot twist, which did a solid job of conveying loss in a visual way. • Camera tricks were well executed - again, you seem to have a good grasp of visual storytelling - good vision here!
Improvements: • The actors didn't seem completely into their scenes (smiling when they should've played it more 'sad', etc)- It takes me out of what could be a very powerful emotional narrative- the way your actors play scenes is just as important as the concept itself. Something to keep in mind on your next project ofc. • The editing was a bit jumpy at times, felt rushed; When going for visual effects, tricks, etc- some extra pre-planning goes a very long way to ensure everything is smooth in the edit.
Judge 2
Positives: The reveal was well structured within the editing and narrative; deception was effectively achieved. All factors within cinematography completed well including composition, coloring, stabilization, and exposure.
Improvements: The narrative could be enhanced with the use of dialogue and sound effects; further characterization could strengthen the message or give insight into how the protagonist feels.
Judge 3
Positives: I thought the idea of the first and last shots as parallels worked really nicely with each other. I also thought the framing throughout the film was good, especially in the bathroom mirror shots.
Improvements: The story was confusing to follow along with at times. I wish there was a dialogue being heard, because you can see it happening.
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