Sticking With It - ID# 261

Wheaton Academy
News Package
Entry Description

featuring Brendan Novak

Copyright Info

Recent Teacher Comments

  • 4/27 7:52 am - Nice story and segment flow. Good b-roll and your audio is good as well. The reporter should have just one hand on the microphone. Having two is a sign up weakness or nervousness.
  • 3/7 9:56 am - Very well organized story, with various different shots to really highlight Brendan and his talent!
  • 3/5 9:34 am - Good nats, good storytelling - solid pkg. My only criticism would be that he seems like a good cello player but I'm not sure his story is that "special." Otherwise, award consideration piece.
Judge 1

Positives: - You did a great job of weaving his music in and out of the story, including using it as natural sound at the top and throughout. That really helps on a music story. Well done! - Some of your b-roll shots look outstanding. The interview is really well framed, which helps us focus on him.

Improvements: - This story just needed a bit more shot variety. We needed some tight shots of him playing the cello (his fingers plucking the strings, his face, maybe his feet if they kept rhythm, etc.). The sequences would have taken this over the top

Judge 2

Positives: Great use of nats to start the pkg. I like how you got current video as well as old pictures to help depict the timeline and his story. I like how you allowed his music to trail in the background.

Improvements: It's okay to do a tight shot on an interview. There is so much empty space in that auditorium. It's distracting. The pkg is a bit long. Try cutting it to 1:15-1:30. After the line... in the future and add some nats of him playing to end it. You don't always have to have a standup.

Judge 3

Positives: Excellent use of natural sound Well written and narrated at a steady pace. Great story

Improvements: The broll was good but it would look even better if you have a more diverse range of shots. Try to shoot a series of shots that relate to the same activity to form a sequence. The sequence is key to visual storytelling.

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