Brian - ID# 271
Wheaton Academy
Comedic Narrative
Entry Description
Brian gets in the way
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 3/27 2:45 pm - Works well - Lots of cool camera shots. The concept was fun. Good performances from talent. Needs work - The pacing in editing was a bit off at times. The timeline of the story didn't make sense with the daylight outside. The suspension of disbelief was rough with the character being so absolutely awful at his job - the other guy would have left him behind in the car for sure. There needs to be some believability for this to work.
- 2/24 12:11 pm - Many interesting camera angles. Creative shooting. It felt like the beginning went on too long before the burglary. Too much build up. Add a dissolve or a title page to indicate transition from day to night. It was an entertaining story. Appropriate background music and clear audio.
- 2/21 12:49 pm - Camera: White balance is important. It looks like you tried to color correct it, but it didn’t work. Also, there is a massive continuity issue between the times of day in which the film takes place (literally in a matter of moments it went from day to night). Lighting: Most of the shots were lit appropriately, but the consistency between wider shots and closeups was off. Sound: Dialogue was audible and seemed to be mixed correctly. Some of the sound effects and music got a little bit hot in the mix, but overall acceptable. Editing: Proficient. Story: Story seemed like it was supposed to be about burglars who bungled the job. You could have cut off most of the introduction scene (exteriors) and just started with them breaking into the house at night, and then added more acts of foolishness during the burglary to make it more funny.
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