Caring Custodian - ID# 30
Geneva
News Package
Entry Description
The story of the custodial staff at Geneva High School and their work behind the scenes
Copyright Info
Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/27 9:46 am - Interesting story. Well put together. The person being interviewed should be off center using the rule of thirds with more space in front of them. What happened to the interview? It looks out of focus. Good b-roll, but you should give attribution to b-roll that you don’t shoot. Since it is a human interest story, music underneath is acceptable, but keep it playing when other people are talking.
- 3/6 9:55 pm - Love the inclusion of music with your voiceover- well incorporated- cutting it seemed sudden and abrupt at times; last interview bite with him was him not looking into the camera-try a different camera angle where we get him eye level
Judge 1
Positives: - I like the varied use of shots! The custodian covers the school as a whole, and I feel like you did a good job of showing that. - Great job on including some personal sound at the end. It helps the viewer understand your character! And I like how you changed your interview angle. Well done!
Improvements: - This story would have benefitted from some natural sound. When he's driving the machine, or mopping, there are little opportunities for sound that can make a big difference. It breaks up your voiceover, and it helps your story flow overall. Don't be afraid to include little bits of that next time. - While I enjoy the variety of your shots, there's little sequencing or consistency in composition. Try to vary between wide shots, medium shots and tight shots. All the pans are a little too much.
Judge 2
Positives: I really like your story subject. You really show the hard work that is put in and what is done for the students that they may never see. I like how you allow your subject to really give the truth and explain what he does. You did a good job getting a variety of broll instead of using the same shots over and over. This is the perfect length for a pkg.
Improvements: I don't understand why you had music under your track but not under the sots. It seemed odd not to carry it through the whole piece. Your interviews look blurry. When you shoot in a room with a lot of windows, you need to be really mindful of the lighting. As you get more light, you need to continue to white balance.
Judge 3
Positives: The reporter's writing played well with video-- The opening shot/track was excellent example of visual storytelling. Video was shot well and creatively
Improvements: I would've liked to see a reporter stand-up to show on-air presence I would have preferred no music in the background... instead, use natural sound from each clip to drive the story.
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