When I Wore These Shoes - ID# 42
Maine South
Dramatic Narrative
Entry Description
A chronicle of the ups and downs of life as told from the perspective of a pair of shoes.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/24 2:37 pm - Superb visual storytelling – very unique and heartfelt. You are very talented filmmakers. The lighting was excllent. I truly appreciated the editing pace. The exposure almost always worked - you clearly have a strong understanding of the exposure triangle. I loved the memory montage at 3:55 – there is something about a memory montage using footage already seen that always hits home. One thing that could be strongly imporved is the sound design. Hearing the sounds of holding, tapping, and walking in the shoes would go a long way in emersing the audience into the story. This can be recorded onset or via Foley. If your film included these audio elements consistently, the short would be boosted to an entirely knew level. Still, good job including such sound at 2:58, but the piece would be stronger if it continued throughout. Overall, outstanding job.
- 3/1 2:44 pm - Story: Your story is complete and shows a clear message for the perspective of shoes. I love the take on that! Sound: The soundtrack makes your piece feel nostalgic. Great choice! Your story is already so strong that no dialogue is needed. Great work! Camera: Your camera compositions demonstrate lots of skill. I really loved your opening shot! It’s very clever how you use a low angle through the entire film. It works well with how your story is told. One suggestion I do have is at 1:37. I really wish the shoes were in focus here! Lighting: Great use of lighting throughout. Especially during the crash scene, I love how you used the police lights to convey that there were authorities at the sight. Great choice! Editing: Overall your pacing works well. We stayed on shots long enough to understand the information that was being given to us. Great editing at 3:08 to convey the character’s eyes opening and closing. Something minor I noticed was that at 1:07 - 1:08 it seems like you used warp stabilizer. It works on the rest of the shot. At the very end, it gets a little too warped and wavy. It’s not too noticeable but still something to watch out for.
- 2/23 11:33 am - Camera: Your camera work is advanced; despite only using the low angle method, you had a diverse range of shots, movements, and compositionally you kept me engaged throughout the piece. Well done! Lighting: Some of the shots inside and at night could have used additional lighting. Sound: The absence of a voice over or any dialogue didn’t harm this piece, because your visual storytelling was so strong. The music was deeply connected; you made the right choice. Very powerful and emotional song. Editing: Great editing pace to fit the music and the life experiences. One tip - make a “festival cut” and don’t include the credits at the end, because they are ridiculously long. Let the film speak for itself, which it does. Story: Great concept. It tells a complete story with a lot of different life experiences just from the perspective of the shoes. Adidas should buy this from you. The ending was an unexpected twist, and very powerful.
Judge 1
Positives: • Really cool perspective taken here- you clearly recognized & utilized the value prop of filmmaking: Telling a story only visually in a way that people don't expect- great thinking & execution here. Very thought-provoking as well. • The variety of situations we see these character in adds a lot of depth & emotion to this - I'm impressed at how you were able to evoke such emotion thru shoes!
Improvements: • Because you're restricted to just showing the shoes, you have to be a lot more deliberate with the surroundings these characters are in. I think you have a solid grasp on that, but the ending isn't as clear as it could be. • Again, you've done a great job with what's here- however I think seeing the characters/shoes in even more situations- more unexpected situations (like the accident) would have really helped elevate this!
Judge 2
Positives: Editing is well thought out; Style is good for narrative
Improvements: Action in the plot or dialogue could enhance message
Judge 3
Positives: I think the quality and framing of shots throughout the film were done really well and there were some really good camera movements. I understood the story and think it was executed really well.
Improvements: Always remember to start any film with a frame of black. The music was a little overpowering. I don't think the car crash was needed at all. I think it already told a good enough story about growth and could have taken a different route as to why the shoes aren't being used anymore. I also think the repeat shots at the end were not needed.
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