Riverside Swim Club - ID# 490
Riverside Brookfield
Documentary
Entry Description
This documentary focuses on the historic Riverside Swim Club
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 3/28 11:33 am - Keepers: You're to be commended for producing a near half hour documentary. That is a tremendous amount of work to pull off and thank you for explicitly stating that this is an excerpt. The audio quality of the interviews and the visual compositions of them was very strong. Improvements: The graphs and examples of potential expense estimates are very hard to read and don't really tell the viewer anything. I get that these are primary source documents and you captured them. But instead, consider making specific graphics for the film that are easier to read and easily convey the message for the viewer. As they are, the viewers aren't engaging with them because they're too hard to see and there is too much text. As a whole, the story needed to be enhanced. It need more live action broll rather than just still shots of empty pools during the season or the offseason. We needed to see people using the pool or people on site assessing it. We needed to see board meetings or photos of those meetings. Be careful how you present your broll. The photos of the renderings are at times without context. We see a number of renderings of the new design but it's not mentioned by the speakers until almost 4 minutes in. This documentary suffered from a lack of emotional pull and this could have been easily remedied with music. We needed some songs to help push emotions and pace the documentary accordingly.
- 3/5 7:55 pm - The audio sounds great, and the video is all clean and looks great. Good job incorporating appropriate b-roll. Good job tackling a complex topic and making it make sense–even in this short excerpt.
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