@JadaGray54 - ID# 520
Glenbrook South
Seven Day Challenge
Entry Description
Jada Gray who is a famous influencer has an obsessed fan. When the fan doesn't have the interaction she hoped for, she goes off the rails.
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Judge 1
Positives: 1. Your lighting choices were very well done, as the contrast of the bright lighting from Jada and the dark room and flat look of the "superfan" really set the distinction between the character's personalities 2. Your camerawork was steady and smooth, and you used a variety of angles to your advantage 3. Your editing choices, especially in the bathroom breakdown scene, really captured the declining mental state of the character with quick cuts and close ups
Improvements: 1. The start of the character's breakdown didn't seem to have much reasoning behind it other than being ignored, and this did not pack much of a punch. Crazy superfans would be the kind of people to lurk around even if being ignored, so an argument or threat from Jada herself would be a better reason to have the meltdown 2.The beginning was long, but did not have much variety. I would have liked to have seen some costume changes for Jada and a wider variety of angles to show the passage of time that indicates how long this superfan has been stalking Jada online 3.The music was a bit too loud at points, and I think it wasn't necessary at some times. You could have used silence to your advantage to create a truly creepy setup to the stalker character, like when she strokes the photo of Jada. If you suddenly cut off the music of Jada's video when showing this character, it would have brought the eeriness to the table even more.
Judge 2
Positives: I really enjoyed this story. Having the short start off with an obsessed fan and see their transformation into an influencer was really engaging. Especially in the end when the character has to deal with their own obsessed fan. You did a really good in the edit to make this flow. I felt like we moved naturally from one scene to the next. That mixed with a good variety of shots helped to unify the story.
Improvements: I felt like I wanted more moody lighting in the bathroom. It felt a little flat. The character is going through a struggle. I wanted to feel that struggle elevated by having contrast on their face. 2:10 Not sure if this was intentional or not but I feel like i wanted the talent in the left third of the frame. They are framed up in the middle and I feel like it would've felt better for the story to have them feel confined to one side of the frame.
Judge 3
Positives: The use of music to help support the story was excellent, especially the ending song. The story as a whole was creative and unique which drew the viewer in and the twist at the end was a nice touch. The use of different locations and settings can be difficult at times so great use of a variety.
Improvements: The audio could have been improved upon. The music bed and dialogue needed to be more balanced instead of competing and the piece could have benefited from more dialogue to help make the story clearer. At times, the shots were a bit long so there could have been more variety in shots and quick cuts to help keep the viewers' attention. When the lighting was good, it was very good such as the opening shots with the influencer. However, the nighttime shots were super dark, and then, when light was added, those spots were blown out and not natural. There needed to be more balance and control over the lighting elements.
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