Theater Troubles or (An Exploration of the Theatrical Space and the Imbroglio of Encountering a Multifarious Array of Eccentric Personages While Indulging in the Cinematic Medium) - ID# 523
Maine East
Seven Day Challenge
Entry Description
A young ingenue attends the cinema to view her theatrical debut...which is nearly ruined by the curse of other people.
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Judge 1
Positives: 1. The camerawork was crisp, clean, and beautiful and portrayed each of the whimsical characters beautifully 2. The choice to not use dialogue was interesting but worked well for the film, as the sound effects did all they needed to to fill in the gaps
Improvements: 1. I knew that the main character was there to watch her own theatrical debut, but it didn't seem to be focused on her debut much. I wish that were explored more, even just a simple clip of her being shown on screen, just to justify us seeing why she is there in the theater, otherwise it's easy to forget that she's watching a movie she is in rather than just any normal movie. By the way the other patrons were acting, it doesn't make as much sense for them to act recklessly to the actress they are literally watching on screen when she is in front of them. 2. We are only introduced to three of these "theater troubles" when there is a whole slew of them in the theater. It would be nice t explore more of them, even if in quick succession, and see ur main characters annoyed reactions as the chaos develops into mayhem to solidify the premise of the piece more. The conflict seemed thin, so having mayhem occur, the actress flips out on the theater, and they apologize would make the ending scene where she hands out autographs more genuine if they would genuinely apologize, otherwise we are left wondering why she happily gives out autographs to people who annoyed the heck out of her in the theater.
Judge 2
Positives: This was really fun to watch. Even though I don't agree with the use of music produced for other projects it did work. The flow was steady the whole time. I did not feel like we were dragging or rushing through scenes. You did really well in establishing the sound effects early on to help set the tone. Most of the time people don't know what they are getting into when entering a theater. You established that it was going to be lighthearted from the beginning and not to be taken too seriously. In one word. This was fun. I was a big fan of Lil Corn and Babyyy
Improvements: I said it but I don't agree with the choice of using the Lala Land composition. You can find some great pieces online created by local artists. The music works but I wanted more. At 2:17 it is not in focus. It briefly takes me out of an otherwise flawless short. Good work.
Judge 3
Positives: The use of sound effects and music really elevated this piece. It helped convey the story and bring it to life. The character choice and development were comical and well done given the length of the piece and lack of dialog.
Improvements: The plot point of the main character attending a film featuring her was not clearly conveyed. Was this plot point necessary or did it overcomplicate the story? This piece could have benefited from more of a variety of camera shots including panning/tilting/dolly shots.
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