Sleep Deprivation PSA - ID# 412

Riverside Brookfield
Public Service Announcement
 
Entry Description

The struggle with sleep and the effects on mental health.

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Recent Teacher Comments

  • 4/23 10:19 pm - Well lit, clean edits, steady shots. I think quicker edits would make the situation feel more intense and stressful. There's not really a call to action...what do you want viewers to do, as a result of watching your PSA?
  • 2/26 2:28 pm - STORY: you did a great job of showing a very busy student who stays awake all night doing homework. What we didn't see was the impact of that. We didn't see her oversleeping, we didn't see her falling asleep in class, we didn't see her with messy hair, bags under her eyes, wearing pajama pants and not showering for 3 days. We didn't see her being a jerk to her parents because she's crabby, we didn't see her blowing off friends or calling in sick to work because she's exhausted. We saw 1 night of her life, but none of the impact of sleep deprivation. PRODUCTION: great camera work and lighting, music bed was a bit too hot. Watch your audio levels on the VU meter. If you have no voice over or dialogue, then your music is the primary source. But your levels should be between -6 and -12, and I'm guessing these were closer to 0. If it's in the red, that's not good.
Judge 1

Positives: Your actor looked and felt depleted! The edit's pacing built to the end, which was creative and effective in telling your story. Overall, it was a really strong, well-done, and interesting edit! Great music choices and sound edits!

Improvements: Lighting a bit brighter on the notebook paper.

Judge 2

Positives: 1 - the repeated use of the homework list 2 - the music transition from where she puts on her headphones

Improvements: 1 - could have shown the clock a second time 2 - facial expression could have conveyed more "struggle"

Judge 3

Positives: There was a strong use of opacity and overlaying different shots to convey the message and tone of the piece. The music aligned with the mood of the message. The call to action was well supported with a stat and resource.

Improvements: The color temperature is different between shots which causes an inconsistent look throughout the video. The pacing could have been improved upon since some of the shots felt too long. The footage could have been more creative with more of a range of camera angles and movement to help convey the story.

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